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We all contribute to, and are influenced by, the communities that are meaningful to us. Share how you’ve been shaped by one of the communities you belong to.
Remember that this essay is about you and your lived experience. Define community in the way that is most meaningful to you. Some examples of community you might choose from are: family, school, shared interest, virtual, local, global, cultural. (350 words)
This is a diversity essay, which asks you to reflect on a community that has significantly shaped you. Your goal is to showcase how your identity, values, and experiences are connected to a particular group, or, in other words, how this group has influenced your personal growth. Basically, while most of your Cornell application is focused on you alone, here the admissions committee is looking for insight into how you see yourself within the context of a broader group.
Understanding the Prompt
This essay asks you to do three main things:
Define your community: Choose a community that is truly meaningful to you. This could be anything from a cultural group, to a club, to a group of friends who share a common interest. The definition is up to you, so think deeply about where you feel the deepest sense of belonging.
Reflect on your experience: Consider how being a part of this community has shaped you. How have your beliefs, values, and goals evolved due to your membership in it? What experiences within this community have been most impactful?
Focus on you: While the community is the lens through which you tell your story, the overall focus should still be on your personal growth and development. The admissions officers want to understand how your community has contributed to who you are today, so make sure the essay is about you, not the overall community.
Brainstorming Questions
To help you get started, consider the following questions:
What community do you feel most connected to, and why?
What values or beliefs have you developed because of this community?
How has your community supported you during challenging times or celebrated your successes?
Can you recall a specific event or moment that encapsulates your relationship with this community?
In what ways have you contributed to your community, and how have those contributions shaped your identity?
How would you be different if you were not part of this community?
One quick note here: if you are part of a community that is related to your racial identity, and you feel your race is an important part of who you are, focusing on that group could be a good idea. In June 2023, the Supreme Court overturned affirmative action, which means college admissions officers are no longer allowed to directly consider a student’s race or ethnicity. They can, however, consider race as part of a student’s broader story, in particular through the essay.
While you definitely don’t have to write about your race in response to this prompt, do be aware that if you don’t, and also don’t discuss it in any of your other essays, Cornell will be legally forbidden from factoring this aspect of your identity into their decision.
What Makes a Good Response
A strong essay will have the following elements:
Personal Connection: Clearly show why this community is significant to you. Detailed descriptions of your involvement and vivid storytelling about your experiences will be both informative and engaging to read.
Impactful Growth: Demonstrate how the community has influenced your personal growth and shaped your identity, whether by learning new values, gaining a sense of belonging, or developing leadership skills.
Specificity: Use specific examples or anecdotes to illustrate your points. Rather than just stating you learned a lesson, show readers the moment when you came to that realization. Or instead of just mentioning a tradition within your community, place readers right alongside you and let them experience it vicariously.
Reflection: Go beyond just telling a story. Reflect on what these experiences mean to you and why they matter to understanding who you will be in college.
Authenticity: The essay should feel genuine and true to your experience. Avoid exaggerating or choosing a community just to impress the admissions committee–being disingenuous will show.
Hypothetical Student Examples
Student A: A first-generation Mexican-American student. Growing up in a predominantly Hispanic neighborhood, they found a deep connection with their local community center, where they volunteered as a mentor for younger kids. This student could discuss how the sense of responsibility they developed there shaped their desire to become a teacher.
Student B: A member of an online fandom community. This student grew up in a small town where they felt isolated because of their unique interests in niche sci-fi books. They found a community online where people shared their passion, which gave them a sense of belonging and made them more self-confident.
Student C: A student who has been on a competitive dance team since they were a child, which has taught them about being in touch with your body. That ability has inspired them to try things that would typically scare them, like rock climbing and snorkeling, because they can recognize the line between being out of your comfort zone physically and genuine pain.
Notice that these examples focus on three very different communities. While the word “community” may initially inspire thoughts of groups related to your race, gender, ***uality, cultural heritage, and so on–and you definitely can write an excellent essay about any of those things–don’t be afraid to cast a wider net.
Common Mistakes to Avoid
Being too broad: Avoid general statements about your community that could apply to anyone. Be specific about your experiences and your connection to the community.
Focusing too much on the community and not enough on yourself: Remember, the essay is about you. You want your reader to come away from the essay wanting to accept you to Cornell, not join this community themselves.
Choosing a cliché lesson: If the dancer above talked about resilience and hard work, their essay would blend in with thousands of others written by student-athletes. Make sure you have something to offer that’s unique to your own experience.
Overemphasizing your contributions: While you do want to show how you’ve contributed to your community, this isn’t a resume. Your priority should be on showing how the community shaped you, not flexing your achievements.
Writing about a community you’re not genuinely connected to: Don’t choose a community just because you think it will sound impressive. Your essay will be more compelling if it’s about a community you genuinely care about, even if it’s less “impressive” on paper.
Good and Bad Examples
Good Example
“The aroma of freshly made paratha fills the air as I step into my grandmother’s kitchen, where generations of recipes and stories come alive. Here, in this tiny kitchen in our home in Queens, my connection to my South Asian heritage is most vibrant.
Every Saturday, my family gathers to cook traditional dishes, each spice and ingredient a thread in the rich tapestry of our culture. As I mix the dough, my grandmother recounts tales of her childhood in Punjab, and I feel a deep connection to a place I’ve never been but know intimately through her stories. It was in this kitchen that I learned about my grandmother’s childhood, saw pictures of my parents’ wedding, and even listened to my first Bollywood song—‘Tera Naam Liya.’
This weekly ritual of cooking and sharing a meal has taught me the importance of tradition, family, and the power of storytelling. It’s in these moments that I’ve learned to appreciate my roots, which have grounded me in my identity even as I navigate the complexities of being a first-generation American.”
Why it’s good: This example uses vivid imagery to bring the reader into a specific experience within a clearly defined community. The student not only shows a deep personal connection to their cultural heritage, but also reflects on how the culture’s traditions have shaped their identity and values.
Bad Example
“I have always been part of my school’s debate team, and it has shaped me into a confident and articulate person. We meet twice a week to practice, and I have learned a lot about different topics and how to argue effectively. Being on the team has helped me develop my public speaking skills and taught me the importance of being prepared. Overall, my experience on the debate team has made me a better student and a more well-rounded person.”
Why it’s bad: This example is too generic and could apply to anyone on a debate team. There are no specific details about the student’s experience, nor deeper insight into how being on the team has shaped them. The reflection is shallow, and focused more on the skills gained than on what this community means to the student as an individual. |
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