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topwayer

RECOMMENDATION

University of International
Business and Economy ,
Beijing, 100029, P.R.China
Sep 28, 1998

Dear professors:

Miss Shan graduated from the Department of International Business Management of our university in 1990. It was in one of my lectures that I got to know her. What made her impressive was her sensible and creative questions. Although she has never been a student in any of my courses, she often consulted with me about problems related to economics. So I am quite familiar with her. I feel strongly that Miss Shan has unusual talents and abilities qualifying her for your MBA program and I hope that you will consider my observations and remarks in evaluating her application.（这一段作为第一段太长，不符合英文书信的习惯。）

Miss Shan was an outstanding student. Her excellent performance in undergraduate study can demonstrate her potential ability. Her overall grades ranked the top 3 out of 40 students at graduation. But Miss Shan did not direct all her efforts to exams. She read extensively in related fields. Business Law, Marketing, Finance and journalism are all intriguing to her. The department had ever nominated her to be a graduate student without examination, but she had her own idea about the future. She want to obtain more practical experience in the field of management, and then pursue Master degree in Business Administrative in U.S.A.

Miss Shan is good at communicating in oral and written English. Some main courses of her undergraduate study was taught by U.S. professors. The foreign professors took her oral English as pure and her written English as standard.

As to personal character, diligence and cooperation may be two main points in Miss Shan. In fact, her optimistic and easy-going nature has made her a central figure among her classmates.

So I believe Miss Shan has the requisite qualification to pursue a MASTER degree in your program. I recommend her with the highest enthusiasm. And I shall appreciate your favorable consideration of her application for admission and financial aids.

天马行空

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topwayer

University of International Business and Economics
Beijing, 100029, P. R. China
Sept. 28, 1998


Dear colleagues:

This is to recommend Ms. Shan Shan, a graduate from this university's Department of International Business Management, for acceptance into your MBA program.

I have known Ms. Shan as a resourceful and goal-oriented individual since 1990, when she attended a lecture I delivered, at which she asked perceptive and challenging questions. Although she did not officially take a course with me, she often consulted me on issues arising out of her studies. I therefore have come to know her well. I feel strongly that Ms. Shan's unusual talents and abilities will stand her in good stead for a quality MBA education, which should serve as a major boost to her career.

While at this university, Ms. Shan was an outstanding student, boasting excellent performance in all subjects of her studies and demonstrating great potential. Her overall GPA ranked her among the top 3 in her class of 40 students. But Ms. Shan was no bookworm devoted exclusively to exams. She read extensively in subjects outside her major, particularly in business law, marketing, finance and journalism, all of which seemed to be fascinating to her. In recognition of her intellectual strengths, the department offered, at the time of her graduation, to accept her into its graduate without the normally mandatory examinations. She, however, turned down the offer. A highly independent woman,（原文没有这个短语。修改稿加上之后，突出了重点。不仅要有事例，更要写明事例体现了什么品质。） she already had her own agenda set. She wanted to obtain practical management experience first and then proceed to pursue a Master's Degree in Business Administrative in your country. She apparently made the right decision, for she has since become one of our most successful graduates in her crop of students.

Ms. Shan is good at communicating in both oral and written English. Some of her most important undergraduate courses were taught by American professors, many of whom considered her oral English as native and her written English as standard. I am sure that she has since improved her English a lot more in her professional life.

In Ms. Shan, we all saw an optimistic and easy-going character. With highly unusual determination, she is not to be daunted by any difficulties. She believes that, with hard work, she can achieve anything she wants. I think her confidence in herself is well grounded in her track record, especially when considering the fact that she entered into this university as the daughter of a most impoverished family, but graduated as a top student.（老外比较看好起点不高，但通过个人努力最终取得成绩的学生。这也是他们文化背景中崇尚个人奋斗的体现。）

Judging by what I know of her, I think Ms. Shan is fully qualified to pursue an MBA degree in your program. I therefore recommend her with enthusiasm. And I shall greatly appreciate if you can favorably consider her application for admission and financial aid.


Yours sincerely

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