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作者: wxd5118    时间: 2003-5-10 00:35     标题: 请指点我的issue 81

请指点我的第一篇完整的issue.    issue 81 靠传统的方式,每人能成功。多谢!

The issue of whether an business can achieve lasting success or become more and more rich in the environment of drastic market competition by conventional practices or way of thinking attracts many people’s attentions. Some people believe that an corporation can outweigh other companys by conventional practices; others, basing on their experience and insight, maintain that an business can succeed among the environment of competition over other competitors by non-conventional business behaviors. In my point of view, I totally agree the latter one that only if an company adopted advanced and progressive business practices, it would increasingly succeed more. In the following analysis, I would like reason and provide evidence to support my statement.

To begin with, under the environment of free market, bussinesses face all kinds of challenges from other competitors and customers have the right to chose their satisfactory productions. It is necessary for these businesses to enhance the quality of the products, increase the patterns of products, and bolster the skills of employees if they expect to meet the demand of customers and thereby promote competitive ability. However, using conventional business practices, the corporations can not achieve their goal. The conventional stereotypes do not adapt to the requirement of society because they can not keep step with fashion.

In contrast, innovative and progressive business practices that improve the traditional modes of services and productions will continuously bring benefit to companys, making these organizations at an advantage over their competitors. For example, in the 1970’s, producer of Beta fromat for vidio cassette recoders first developed this kind of recoder. But, ove time, it lost a majority of its market share to its competitor, a developer of VHS(video home system) format for this recorder. The reason for the success of the VHS business was that it abandoned the conventional means of market promotion, a means that did not cooporate with other manufacturer but devoted to monopoly market alone, while adopting the method of sharing market and technology with others.


Admittedly, not any thing conventional is out of date and therefore should be discarded. A particular example for this is Coca Cola corporation. To bolster its sale, Coca Cola planed to change the ingredient of its product, but this behavior irritated almost all of the customers, which insisted that they only favored conventional pattern of baverage. Given this, Coca Cola was obliged to cancel its plan and continuted to persist the old pattern. However, this case are rare and therefore are too specific and too weak to strengthen the view that the conventiaonal is better.

To sum up, it is likely that people will never arrive at the same conclusion on such a controversial issue. Nevertheless, taking into account the various dimensions of the issue disscussed in the above analysis will certainly contribute to our understanding of the complexities of the issue.
作者: gladys    时间: 2003-5-10 11:18

To wxd5118,

我觉得你的这篇文章写得挺好。

好象你并没有用很常用的模板,用词遣句还挺灵活的。

思路很明确。 也不是做的一边倒的论证, 属于大正小负型,体现出你对这道题目
中的问题有很深的认识。

我觉得是写得非常好。

另外,我想请问你, 你写这篇作文用了多少时间?

祝好!


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作者: wxd5118    时间: 2003-5-10 23:52

不好意思,由于是第一次写,思路没有练畅通,用了近50分钟。我是先练AA的,近期才开始进入到AI。共同努力吧!我本人是不喜欢用太多模版的。只要有合适例子,不用模版很快就会上400字。如果用大多模版一是分数不会太高,另外有此时间不如加入自己的东西。另外,我觉得AA还是的靠模版,但AI在初期时应以提高写作能力为主,后期再练一下套用大量模版,以防机考时间紧张、缺乏思路。--小生之见
作者: gladys    时间: 2003-5-11 15:06

To Wxd5118,

很赞同你的观点。 不过这样的话,你花在作文上的时间也就挺多的了。

第一次写用50分钟能上400多字已很不错了, 我第一次写用了2钟头, 现大概写了三十多篇左右, 但是写作还是没有得心应手的感觉, 也许真正上了考场后,一有压力反而速度会上来。

AA 的确是有一点套路的, 我刚看完所有AA的题目,列了一下纲。从现在到考前,准备每天花个20分钟准备作文,重点是在AI上。

很高兴与你交流作文心得!
作者: excellent    时间: 2003-10-16 11:13

文章写的不错,结构清晰,例子丰富,语法错误很少!

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