一、美国留学PS开头--重复简历型
I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university
点评：美国留学ps不要去重复简历中的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。
二、美国留学PS开头--学校介绍型
I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.
点评：该同学的ps开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒据掉。
三、美国留学PS开头--抄袭句式型
As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.
点评：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。
四、美国留学PS开头--救世主型
I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …
点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。ps的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹大牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。作者: Ninassa 时间: 2014-1-21 12:31
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