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请问这篇作文能得几分?

这是我刚写的一篇作文,问题一定很多,只是想让大家客观地评价一下大概能得几分。(能得4分吗?)谢谢!

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        what is the best strategy to manage a business and contribute to the success of the company? different people hold different opinions due to their respective angles. some believe that constituting appropriate business regulations is the most effective way to run a company. others, however, argue that maintaining the highest ethical standards must bring the corporation long-term benefits. generally speaking, i agree that searching for the most capable people and offering them the biggest possible authority is the best strategy for the success of the company although there are many other effective managing strategies such as team working and reducing layers of the management. my point of view will be strongly supported by the following several reasons.

        the main reason is that human resources are becoming more and more important for the maintenance and development and even success of a company. we are living in a knowledge economy; knowledge and information frequently mean superiority, predominance, and transcendency. we also know that knowledge and information are always hold by the most capable people. so hunting for the most capable people is inevitable to a successful business.

        another reason is that if capable employees are entrusted with the necessary authority, they will be able to make full use of their creative potential, making great contributions to the success of the company. when a capable employee is assigned significant work and is offered big authority, he or she will necessarily appreciate this opportunity provided by the company and do his or her endeavor to perform this task and ultimately accomplish it perfectly. consequently, the corporation that giving its capable employees as much authority as possible will tend to succeed.

        admittedly, simply putting the most capable people together and giving them every authority will not necessarily bring out the expected result. therefore, this strategy must be based on an organizational structure that brings all individual efforts together as an organic whole.

        in conclusion, while some may argue that there are some better strategies to manage than i have mentioned above, i would at least show them the virtue of such strategy of searching for the most capable people and giving them the biggest authority. there is little doubt that more and more people will come to realize that human resources are key factors contributing to the success of a company and that offering capable employees more opportunities and much authority is inevitable and wise.

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GMAT作文评分标准细则
  一.六分(outstanding):对事件的复杂性的分析清楚有力;熟练驾驭有效写作的要素。
  a)在就某事件展开分析和阐述自己观点时摆出有洞察力的原因和/或有说服力的事例。
  b)结构清晰。  c)对于语言(包括用词和句法多样性)有很好的掌握。
  d)文章完全符合标准书面英语规范(包括语法、用法和拼写规则),但可能会有小错误。
  二.五分(strong):对事件的复杂性有充分的分析;很好地掌握了有效写作的要素。
  a)阐述观点时能运用恰当有力的理由/或事例。
  b)结构较清晰。 c)对于语言(包括用词和句法多样性)有良好的掌握。
  d)较好的掌握标准书面英语规范(包括语法、用法和拼写规则),但可能会有小错误。
  三.四分(adequate):对事件的复杂性有一定的分析;对写作的要素有一定的掌握。
  a)阐述观点时能举出与事件相关的理由/或事例。
  b)结构基本合理。 c)对于语言(包括用词和句法)有一定的掌握,但句法缺乏多样性。
  d)对于标准书面英语的规范有一定掌握,但有一些错误。
  四.三分(limited):对事件的复杂性有一定的分析;对写作的要素有一定的掌握,但有
       明显缺陷,一般具备下列特征中的一项或几项:
  a)观点模糊或不充分。  b)结构松散。
  c)不善于举出与议题相关的理由或事例。 d)语言不准确且/或句子缺乏多样性。
  e)在语法、用法或拼写上偶有错误或常有小错误。
  五.二分(seriously flawed):在分析性写作技巧上表现出严重缺陷,一般具备下列特征
       中的一项或几项:
  a)观点不明确或未能充分展开。  b)毫无结构可言。
  c)缺乏相关的理由或事例。      d)在语言运用或句子结构上经常出现严重错误。
  e)在语法、用法或拼写上错误很多,影响文章表达。
  六.一分(fundamentally deficient):在分析性写作技巧上有根本缺陷,一般具备下列
       特征中的一项或几项:
  a)无法完整地叙述问题。   b)在语言和句子结构上不断有严重错误。
  c)在语法、用法或拼写上有大量错误,严重影响文章表达。
  七零分:跑题、非英语写作、重抄原题等。
  八NR:白卷。

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请问这篇作文能得几分?

以下是我的拙见:
1)4分只是平均分。依据上面的评分标准,这篇文章可以得4.5-5分。
2)文章全文都没有大小写,应该改正,养成平时就打大小写,在机考打字时就会更省时间。
3)文章最后一段有个语法错误。
"there are some better strategies to manage than i have mentioned above"应该在than后加上what,这样比较的东西才能平行。
4)文章最后一段的最后一句有画蛇添足之嫌。

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