An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following:
·Effectively addresses the topic and task
·Is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details
·Displays unity, progression and coherence
·Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors
On the other hand, sports compose of an indispensable part of lives of young people, especially of children who are growing into adults. For children, physical sports benefit not only their health but also their growth, especially in this society where children are over exposed to junk food such as fried chicken and hamburgers. According to data from health centers in thousands of cities, there are more and more children who suffer from obesity due to unhealthy diet and lack of physical exercises. This obesity would not only affect children’s health but also influence children’s confidence negatively. For example, when I was in my primary school, I was overweight. Because of the large body, I could not run fast and jump far in the physical education class, which depressed me a lot. After I lost my weight through physical exercises, I regained self-confidence and enjoyed playing outdoors with my friends.
First of all, politeness promotes, rather than impedes, the efficiency of normal living by serving to keep and maintain order in people’s lives. Everyone in the society cannot live apart from others. So order would help people to conduct and complete missions easily while disorder would prevent people from finishing them. Consider the transportation which would be fluent if drivers would show respect and politeness to each other and keep going on their own lanes. Otherwise if all drivers had, regardless of others, jumped queues in order to get on their destinations faster, the traffic would have been congested and the result would have gone contrary to drivers’ wishes.
习作1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for government to spend money improving Internet access than improving public transportation.
Both Internet access and public transportation contribute to the prosperity of society and the convenience of individuals. If we have to discuss which one the government should invest more, I would like to argue that public transportation should be supported more by the government financially, although Internet is the sign of modern society.
Admittedly, Internet has benefited human beings by revolutionizing the way by which we communicate with others. Internet has become a crucial instrument upon which we depend to study, to work and to enjoy our lives. Every day, we check out our e-mail box to receive information from others and send e-mail to discuss working affairs. Now we buy goods on the Internet and we watch sports games or videos on the Internet. Apparently, the faster and richer the Internet is, the more convenient and more interesting our lives will be. By the powerful Internet, for instance, we are able to discuss important issues from a very far distance by the video meeting and we are able to watch films on home rather than going to cinema.
Although a better Internet access has its merits, the statement overestimates its importance by concluding from them that government should pay more attention to and invest more on the Internet access. Nevertheless, as I see it, government should serve and care about the majority of people. In my country, a developing one, the people who use the Internet concentrate in the city and more people live in rural areas cannot afford a computer which is the essential device to use the Internet. The major reason for the poverty of the people living in countries, especially those in mountains, is that no road reaches their villages. So prior to the Internet in importance is public transportation which should be built by the government to bring the agricultural products out from the villages into the market and bring the advanced education and technology into those rural areas. Without the thorough public transportation, hardly can people in poor countries foresee a bright and prosperous future, let alone the Internet.
In addition, even in cities, relatively advanced area, it is important for the government to improve the public transportation. Accompanying with the continuing urbanization, more and more people swarm into cities, especially some metropolises. Even with the taxi, bus, and subway, Beijing, for example, has a very poor traffic condition. There are traffic congestions almost every day. The main factor contributing to this situation lies in that many people choose private cars rather than public transportation because of the crowd on the bus and on the subway. It is really a waste of time and a ruin of mood to be stuck in a traffic jam. If the government improved public transportation by increasing more buses and subway lines, more people would be attracted by the convenient and comfortable public transportation and the whole condition of traffic would be better. On the other hand, the Internet has satisfied people very well and enhance of it does not mean much to the public. So I would prefer a better public transportation rather than a better Internet.
In sum, although a better Internet access would be beneficial, the government should care about the demand of most people who live in countryside and the public transportation in cities also should be improved.作者: 什锦河 时间: 2014-3-10 12:16
习作2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Printed books have greater effects on society than television has.
People are surrounded by printed books and television everyday which act very important roles in providing us with knowledge and information. When it comes to the discussion that which one possesses greater effects on our society, I fundamentally agree with the statement that books influence us more.
Admittedly, television has changed our society by the new fast way to spread information. Every day we open the television to know what is happening in the world and what is happening around us. From the television, we know who has just won a gold medal in Olympic Games, which team, Spurs or Heats, has just won the NBA finals and what the weather is tomorrow. In addition, television provides us with many live and interesting teleplays and films which bring laughter when we are in a leisure time. The Big Bang Theory and The Broken Girls are two of my favorite teleplays whose interesting and humorous plots give me a lot of fun when I want to enjoy myself after class.
Although the influence of television on society is great, when compared to that of printed books, I still hold the opinion that printed books impose greater effects on our society. By recording and passing on the wisdom of authors, books have been playing an indispensible role in affecting the world since their emergence. The Bible is the book which has given millions of people the faith to the God and helped them to get the hope of lives. The series of Harry Porter has brought thousands of children and even adults into the magic world which is full of imagination. Although some teleplays or films also reflect the same theme of books, apparently they have never reached so many audiences as the printed books have.
In addition, compared to the relatively narrow range of themes provided by the television, the books included all kinds of fields, from philosophy to literature and from astronomy to geology. Thanks to books, the printed wisdom and talent of masters, we are able to appreciate the love between Romeo and Juliet, the history of our nation, the advanced conception of relativity. Moreover, tremendous kinds of articles and journals, such as Nature and Science, indicate the most cutting-edge science and technology which are seldom displayed on television. For example, for the bridge engineering, the most advanced construction technologies, including increment launching construction, are mainly reported on periodicals while rarely shown on television because other than the professional, little number of people would be interested in such subject. However, these technologies are very important for bridge engineering and only the technological journals are responsible for spreading these crucial technologies which would benefit the whole society by providing methods to construct bridges.
In sum, although television offer news and entertainment for the public, the large amount of readers and the wide range of fields of printed books reveal that books affects greater than television does.作者: 风信子花开 时间: 2014-3-14 11:14
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