名师指导：托福作文构思方向

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托福写作考试有个题目，叫做：You can learn about people by clothes they wear!
　　阿杰根据GRE阅读强化和新概念四册文章的架构，按照上面托福考试的题目，写了下面这篇文章，供大家参考!
　　文笔拙劣，不揣浅薄，望各位朋友斧正、指教!
　　主要是抛砖引玉，给大家提供一个托福和GRE写作结构的思考方向!
　　此外，阅读文章可以从写作的角度去思考、学习，写作的文章则反其道而行之，会有新的启发!
　　Sages have been chattering all the time about the danger and devastation of judging a book by its cover. Admittedly, there is some truth in their effort, as it would be unsophisticated and misleading to calculate one’s moral character and dignity solely by his “cover”, be it his look, stature or even the quality of clothing.(如果字数多了，这个蓝色部分可以删掉) A closer study of the issue, aided by an acute sense of customs and convictions, (如果字数多了，这个蓝色部分可以删掉) however, reveals quite indisputably that one can learn, more or less, about people by the clothes they dress. The most significant information thus gathered is personal identity and cultural inclinations.
　　Coming first to indicate the affinity between the people and their clothing is the identity issue, which serves as a solid, identifiable evidence to my argument. (如果字数多了，这个蓝色部分可以删掉) With different styles of dressing, one intends to articulate his own identity, thus conveying some cultural subtleties, say, his likes and dislikes, his convictions and taboos. The example of Hippies and Yuppies comes readily to one’s mind. Their unconventional, rebellious dressing code, in a non-verbal manner, remained their counter-cultural manifesto. It is also true in the case of politicians and business people, whose clothing undoubtedly helps to differentiate them from those with different pursuits and occupations.
　　With one’s dress, a sensitive, well-informed mind could also gather crucial information about the customs, beliefs and other cultural inclinations of the community the person lives in, though, in some cases，the knowledge thus gained might be insufficient, but certainly not dismissible. (如果字数多了，这个蓝色部分可以删掉)As we are invariably conditioned by our customs upon the very moment of our birth, we grow up to be little creatures of our communities and convictions. Their beliefs are our belief, their impossibilities our impossibilities. (如果字数多了，这个蓝色部分可以删掉). Quite understandably, personal clothes, as an important ingredient of its cultural ambience, definitely speak with a tangible, visible language. The only difference is whether the “reader” is aware of this cultural cue or not. But it is forever out there: substantthing. Instead, a perceptive and reasonable mind forever knows how to explore more, but always by starting with proper knowledge and orientation from what they dress!